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Many people believe that spending a lot of money on celebrations (birthdays/weddings) is a waste of money. Others believe that it is important for the individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #celebrations #birthdays #weddings #waste #individuals #society
In the modern era,Birthdays and
marriages
 are
on
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 of those special days which bring joy
in
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people
's lives.
According to
new
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generation
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 it is
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a wastage
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wastage
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waste
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 of
the
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apply
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money
 to spend more on these occasions but
old
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the old
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 generation still thinks
this
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of this
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as
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is
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 their symbol of status,
whereas
 I think it is not important to impress
people
 by wasting
money
.In
this
essay
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 we will discuss both views and my point of view.
To begin
 with,nowadays,
due to
more
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a more
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 expensive
life style
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lifestyle
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 and
less
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fewer
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 jobs it is very hard for
people
 to earn their livelihood and these special occasions require a huge amount of
money
 on decorations,
arrangements
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and arrangements
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of
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for
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 food, so couples
thinks
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think
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 it is a
wastage
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waste
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 of their earnings.
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, after finishing
studies
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their studies
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, it is hard for youngsters to earn
money
 for their daily expenses as of more population,they get
less
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fewer
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 jobs. So it becomes stressful for them to arrange big
marriages
 and birthday parties and they go for private and less expensive celebrations.
On the other hand
,
people
 in the previous years
thinks
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think
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 that spending a lot of
money
 on their children's
marriages
 shows how rich they are, which increases their importance in
the
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apply
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society.
Moreover
, in the old times, they used to have more sources of income and everything was affordable, so they wanted to spend their lifetime income on these special days.
For instance
, after watching famous
celebrities's
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celebrities'
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 big wedding celebrations,
people
 wanted to get fame in
the
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society, so they think it is important for the individual as it is a symbol of status. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 reckon that a lot of
money
 expenditure on
marriages
 and birthdays is not necessary,
instead
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,instead
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people
 should put
this
money
 in their children's bank accounts as day by day it is getting hard to live in
this
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these
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 expensive surroundings.
To conclude
with
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,
although
 some
people
realizes
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realize
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 the importance of
money
 and try to save it for
future
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, yet, others still
thinks
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think
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 it is important to spend their savings on big celebrations and live in the present. In my opinion, one should consider the value of their hard earnings and should choose small and cheaper ways of
joys
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joy
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.
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