The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project.

The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project.
The column graphs represent information about three
events
attended by a number of people from 2017 to 2020 with the forecast of presence numbers by 2030 after Grandville Stadium refinements in 2019.   On the whole, sport ranked 1 for the most visited event among the three
events
, namely musical
concerts
and theatrical performances.
Conversely
, the data saw a significant increase in
attendance
numbers within
concerts
and theatres.   At the first glance, sporting
events
had much more
attendance
compared to the other two
events
with 148000 visitors at least in 2017. In the same year, the number of
attendance
for
theatre
was about 10000,
while
,at the same time, the figure for
concerts
was about approximately 30000. In 2020, the number of
attendance
for three
events
is gradually rising than in 2017. Regarding the
attendance
numbers in 2020, it consists of around 15000 for
theatre
, a little more than the figure for
theatre
for sporting
events
, and almost 40000 for
concerts
.   It is interesting to note that around 45000 people will have attended
theatre
by 2030,
whereas
because of
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, the concert audiences will become almost triple within a decade.
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