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Many students now work whilst they are studying in college or university. This often results in them having les time to concentrate on their as well as feelingunder pressure. what are some of the causes of this ? what solutions could you suggest?

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Nowadays it's a trend that
students
work
while
 they are studying at college or university.
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 result they could not concentrate on their education.In
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essay I am discussing some causes of
this
 problem and suggest solutions. it is obvious, that today our education system is very expensive that's why so many
students
work
in per
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time
 to fulfilling their expenses.
As a result
 they less concentrate
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 their study.
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 very challenging for admission who come from other countries.they face lots of problems regarding money.So they start per
time
job
.
On the other hand
, by doing a
job
 student gets working experience .In future that helps when they get
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job
.
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part
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time
job
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their
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college or university
then
 get
working
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 experience and they save
their
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time
 . The government should help or loan the student who is not able to financially strong. In my opinion, part-
time
work
 is not harmful unless they less concentrate on their education.If the
students
 are eligible for
work
 that could be great for their future. In conclusion,Government should give some facilities
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students
.
students
 our future so they have to complete their studies without any
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complication
complications
.
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