It is important for people to take riske, both in their professional lives and their personal lifes. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
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, it is common sense that big risks are always associated with substantial benefits. Linking Words
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, people should embrace adventure if they want more. But I do disagree with Linking Words
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logic because they simply ignore the reason and the whole movement behind it.
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Secondly
, we should open our minds to figure out why people choose to take an adventure. There could be more gold waiting to be dug even in the form of personal ambition. The vital problem is that it's the situations folks grow up in that decide their choices ubiquitously rather than their consciousness. Linking Words
For instance
, taking considerable peril for a person who was born into a disruptive family full of quarrels and violence in order to get out of his bad situation is necessary. Linking Words
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, there is no need for a Linking Words
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adult to gamble his life multiple times.
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Thirdly
. From another extender perspective, The essential and unavoidable competition which brings anxiety is a fake concept made by the government or capitalism to keep labourers working. For most human beings, life is just a pile of experiences of Linking Words
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world which is full of ever-growing and objective transformation and evolution. Linking Words
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alternation movement process is a kind of cumulation Linking Words
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of some sharp fierce bursts. Unprecedented ambiguity only emerges if people overlook daily cumulations Linking Words
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and suddenly want to challenge with naivety. Rephrase
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For example
, a college graduate who tries to build a corporation from scratch with no knowledge of business principles could hardly succeed.
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To conclude
, the essence of risk is the cumulation of an alternation. Keeping experience, keeping thinking, and keeping hungry for the daily-evolute world is the best way to build precaution against risks which prey in the key moments of individuals' professional lives and personal lives, or Linking Words
in other words
, the best implement to take risks.Linking Words
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