Defrostation is a serious problem facing our environment nowadays,discuss its causes and solutions suggested for this problem.

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pollution in their city, not only that in the countryside
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trouble
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defrostation
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deforestation
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huge role in
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it.
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on causes and
solution
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. Environmental
frendly
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friendly
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a
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healthy air and a healthy body.
Deforestration
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Deforestation
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our climate change, nowadays many
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had been facing many natural
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. Around 4000
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, it could be a reason why
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indonesia
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always faced
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and villages. People need
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furniture and home floor,
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main role of economic need
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we found that
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wood export is
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leading in
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demand always
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which we
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know Indonesia has a large
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island
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natural disaster annually.
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on global warming, and
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healthy
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. Kalimantan and Sumatera were known as
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countributor
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forest
fires every year. In 2022, Jambi Sumatera Selatan get a fire that
forest
fire smoke to Singapore and Kuala Lumpur.
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ilegal
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by clearing
forest
that causes fires. The government should
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rules with society to make a strict law in the process of making an
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environment
healthy. In
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conclusion
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friendly are the law system and community
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engagement
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the land for farming
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permission from
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and stop illegal activities with a strict law process.
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