Some feel that schools should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to be separated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
In the current world,
where
gender equality is now Rephrase
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being
one of the highest priorities in many countries. Because of that reason, most schools nowadays are mixed with both Unnecessary verb
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genders
learning in the same class. However
, there are still some others who consider male and female ought to be separated; and in my opinion, I do not agree with the second view.
The first reason why I think that girls
and boys should learn in a
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,
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because
they are just Add a missing verb
is because
human-beings
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human beings
Therefore
, when comparing between genders
, there are not any noticeable differences in learning abilities
and ways of thinking in general. Even if we just focus on every advantage of each gender, they just have many equivalent abilities
. For instance
, when men are more powerful and stronger in physical abilities
than girls
, it is also
true that girls
have a
fascinating flexibility. By the way, there are still some boys with Remove the article
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skillful
hands, and Change the spelling
skilful
girls
with outstanding strength, so that in general, they do not have to learn separately.
In addition
, if they are not mixed to learn in the same school, there will be more potential issues which might occur in the future. And the inequality in employment is one of the most obvious and severe problems. Society, especially some people who were born before the 80s, still have biases about genders
. They think that men have a ‘way of better’ abilities
, and more necessary, only they can inherit possessions from their ancestors. Because of that, many managers and employers might choose a large proportion of employees to be male, due to
the
mistaken biases. Even if female life Correct article usage
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now
has Rephrase
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been
improved a lot, there are still Unnecessary verb
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someone
out there who still consider that men are more useful than women, and it can lead to inequality.
In summary, Correct your spelling
some people
although
splitting and separating genders
from learning together seems to be a small actions
, it still causes many potentially dangerous objectives not only in Correct the article-noun agreement
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,
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extends to many fields in the future.Submitted by sinh.ielts on
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