Some feel that schools should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to be separated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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gender equality is now

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one of the highest priorities in many countries. Because of that reason, most schools nowadays are mixed with both

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learning in the same class.

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, there are still some others who consider male and female ought to be separated; and in my opinion, I do not agree with the second view. The first reason why I think that

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and boys should learn in

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they are just

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, when comparing between

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, there are not any noticeable differences in learning

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and ways of thinking in general. Even if we just focus on every advantage of each gender, they just have many equivalent

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, when men are more powerful and stronger in physical

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true that

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fascinating flexibility. By the way, there are still some boys with

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hands, and

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with outstanding strength, so that in general, they do not have to learn separately.

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, if they are not mixed to learn in the same school, there will be more potential issues which might occur in the future. And the inequality in employment is one of the most obvious and severe problems. Society, especially some people who were born before the 80s, still have biases about

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. They think that men have a ‘way of better’

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, and more necessary, only they can inherit possessions from their ancestors. Because of that, many managers and employers might choose a large proportion of employees to be male,

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mistaken biases. Even if female life

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improved a lot, there are still

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out there who still consider that men are more useful than women, and it can lead to inequality. In summary,

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splitting and separating

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from learning together seems to be

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, it still causes many potentially dangerous objectives not only in

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extends to many fields in the future.

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Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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