The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line graph illustrates trends in
shops
closure and openings in a particular country, from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, a fluctuation is observed in the mentioned period of time, but there are two major peaks. One is for the opened
shops
in 2011, which is around 8500. The other is a drastic drop in closures in 2015, reaching less than 1000, with openings being 4000 at the same time. In 2012, the
number
of stores opening falls sharply to 4000, compared to the
number
of closed
shops
which is 6000. From
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2012 to 2014, there is a slight fluctuation but
number
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a number
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of
closed
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store
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is still higher (
maximum
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7000
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in 2013). Between 2015 and 2018, the amount of openings
remains
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stable, showing 3000- 4000.
Number
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A number
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of closings stays the same over these years (5000
shops
).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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