The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line graph illustrates trends in
shops
closure and openings in a particular country, from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, a fluctuation is observed in the mentioned period of time, but there are two major peaks. One is for the opened shops
in 2011, which is around 8500. The other is a drastic drop in closures in 2015, reaching less than 1000, with openings being 4000 at the same time.
In 2012, the number
of stores opening falls sharply to 4000, compared to the number
of closed shops
which is 6000. From to
2012 to 2014, there is a slight fluctuation but Change preposition
apply
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
closed
Add an article
the closed
store
is still higher (Change to a plural noun
stores
maximum
Correct article usage
a maximum
7000
in 2013).
Between 2015 and 2018, the amount of openings Change preposition
of 7000
remains
stable, showing 3000- 4000. Change the verb form
remain
Number
of closings stays the same over these years (5000 Change the article
A number
The number
shops
).Submitted by abtahig on
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