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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large number of students ,but now with the development of the technology for education many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. Agree or disagree

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In today's perpetually transforming epoch. Education is an essential thing for people's bright future.
However
, in the past,
teachers
 prefer to
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lecture in Big crow, but now
due to
 technological improvements in education. Few mankind proclaims that there is not any justification for joining classes. Are you shall give some disagreement view in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with the disagreement side of
this
 trend, the first and foremost is Pupils cannot able to interact with their
teachers
.
In other words
, at the starting age of
students
 when they join their primary school, they do not have the ability to discriminate between right and wrong things. So, you scholars must have a good guide at starting primary school. If
students
does
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 not
attends
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 lectures, they are not able to interact with
teachers
. So, it has many detrimental effects on the scholar.
For example
, not have proper discipline and guidance for
stuyding
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studying
.
Secondly
, through a computer, Pupil cannot attach emotionally.
In addition
, computers give every type of knowledge
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 they want but it does not provide emotional attachment.
However
, the teacher can able to make their lecture interesting through their skills
such
 as giving social knowledge and
tolisten
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to listen
 some funny talk by that
student
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 do not feel
boring
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.
For instance
,
according to
 the Indian government, during Corona pandemic, the rate of join in virtual had
been
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decreased
due to
 low interaction between
teachers
 and
students
, but after Corona ,
pendemic
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pandemic
endemic
 it had increase your 25% population of
students
in
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attending classes in rooms.
Therefore
, giving knowledge a room is better than virtually. In conclusion, I fully disagree with the statement that attending classes has its own positive effects on
students
.
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