Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Other say that people only continued their education because the opportunities exist for them to do so. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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an era of fiercely competitive society

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get the opportunities. Primarily, around two decades ago, most people were easy to access to find

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right occupation with their characters.

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that people are struggling to find their jobs and even employees tend to hard to secure their jobs

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, younger generations are brutally required to

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study backgrounds than others

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demand

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, some pupils

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for having a better chance and it is

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as the better you know, the higher position you get. Take Korea.

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, there are numerous parents now are spending numerous money

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for their children to have better study background than their peers

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, most pupils,

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have to fight with their pals on the

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korea proportion of

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, nowadays people are exposed

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limit

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of jobs and

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phenomenon should be prohibited so that governments need to proper solution

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kind of

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