The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two graphs outline the number of starting a shop and finishing their business.
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, it could be seen that there was a big change in 2015 for both
of
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the parts
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parts
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. From 2015, the data
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having a shop and ending a shop was the lowest. Before 2015, entire parts had
similar
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trend for
2years
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2 years
, between 2011 to 2013,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of openings had
regular
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a regular
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increase in comparison to closures having
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drop point. After they approached the minimum number
at
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4,000 and under
than
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1,000 each in 2015,
two
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subjects showed
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a difference
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difference
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tendency
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from 2016 to 2018. For
this
given time,
he
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caculation
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calculation
of new shops slightly
had
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grown
while
the count of closed shops
were
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heading to decrease
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4,000
until
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2018. For total
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calculation
, the total data combining openings and closures, we can predict that there was the maximum number of business in 2011
while
there was approximately only 5,000
market
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survived.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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