The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two graphs outline the number of starting a shop and finishing their business.
Overall
, it could be seen that there was a big change in 2015 for both of
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apply
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the parts
parts
.
From 2015, the data Correct your spelling
parties
of
having a shop and ending a shop was the lowest.
Before 2015, entire parts had Change preposition
on
similar
trend for Add an article
a similar
2years
, between 2011 to 2013, Correct your spelling
2 years
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the numbers
numbers
of openings had Fix the agreement mistake
number
regular
increase in comparison to closures having Add an article
a regular
one time
drop point.
After they approached the minimum number Add a hyphen
one-time
at
4,000 and under Change preposition
of
than
1,000 each in 2015, Change preposition
apply
two
subjects showed Correct article usage
the two
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a difference
difference
Replace the word
different
tendency
from 2016 to 2018. For Fix the agreement mistake
tendencies
this
given time,he
Correct your spelling
the
caculation
of new shops slightly Correct your spelling
calculation
had
grown Unnecessary verb
apply
while
the count of closed shops were
heading to decrease Change the verb form
was
at
4,000 Change preposition
to
until
2018.
For total Change preposition
by
caculation
, the total data combining openings and closures, we can predict that there was the maximum number of business in 2011 Correct your spelling
calculation
while
there was approximately only 5,000 market
survived.Change to a plural noun
markets
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