Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local person when they visit the cultural and historical attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many think that foreign
tourist
should be given different Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
price
than Fix the agreement mistake
prices
local
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a local
the local
tourist
, and it should be more expensive for Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
foreigner
. Fix the agreement mistake
foreigners
This
essay agrees with the statement and will try to explain the reason behind it.
To begin
with, if a country can make foreigner
to spent Fix the agreement mistake
foreigners
much
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a lot of
money
when visiting the country, it will be beneficial for the economic
. That’s why many Replace the word
economy
countries
nowadays, try to develop more in their tourism
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tourist
place
,
because it will be elevating Remove the comma
apply
local
economy. Correct article usage
the local
For example
, local
resident in Bali, Indonesia Add an article
a local
depends
much Add the preposition
ondepends
to
foreign tourist that Change preposition
on
come
to Bali. The more foreign Change the verb form
comes
people
come to visit Bali, the more money
local resident will get. Another reason is, people
that come
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who come
visit
another country, are Fix the infinitive
to visit
people
that have financially stable and willing
to spend Add a missing verb
are willing
money
while
travelling. They not just visiting
for pleasure only, but to get a new experience that cannot be seen in their origin Wrong verb form
visit
countries
.
Furthermore
, maintaining a historic place
, or Correct article usage
a tourism
Correct article usage
a tourism
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tourist
tourism
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tourist
place
is not cheap. Government need a lot of money
to do that. For that occasion, it is necessary for government
to set a different Add an article
the government
price
for Add an article
a foreigner
foreigner
when they Fix the agreement mistake
foreigners
are
visit. Unnecessary verb
apply
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Writer
Writer’s
believes that it is not a big concern for foreign Correct article usage
The writer’s
people
, because when visiting a historical place
, like Borobudur or Prambanan temple, they cannot see anything the same in their countries
, so it will worth
the Add a missing verb
be worth
price
.
In conclusion, this
essay agrees that foreigner
should pay more Fix the agreement mistake
foreigners
price
that
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than
local
when visiting historical and cultural Fix the agreement mistake
locals
place
, not only it will be beneficial for maintaining the site, but Fix the agreement mistake
places
also
gives a new experience that can be seen in their countries
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