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"Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?"

#fashion #trends #it’s #clothes #people #shouldn’t #dress
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 has been said that the minimum legal
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 for driving and riding should be increased so as to improve
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safety
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. Personally, I firmly disagree with
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, we should emphasize
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people’s driving and riding
skills
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 rather than their
age
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. The main reason why there are thousands of traffic accidents is that because the driving tests are too simple, those who do not have standard
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 still qualify for driving licenses.
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 some teenagers do not have driving licenses, they drive well on the
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.
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,some adults are not good at driving
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 lead to numerous driving accidents.
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,there is no doubt that young
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 is not always the reason why
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 unsafe and driving
skills
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 are the most essential part of
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safety
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. The second reason is that a proper design of
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 is
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than
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 people’s driving
age
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. When the
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 are designed in a strange way,
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 properly, they still will cause car accidents. Take, Taiwan,
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. Taiwan is regarded as
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 hell” by BBC
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 the fact that pedestrians have to walk closely with vehicles as the government did not design
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 which are suitable for every
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 user. In conclusion, designing good
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 for
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 is far
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more important
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 than increasing
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age
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of
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 driving. To summarize, as far as I am concerned, I disagree with the idea of rising the legal
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of
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 driving and riding is not useful to improve
road
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safety
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 for two major reasons.
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,training the public’s driving
skills
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 before they get their licenses is more effective to improve
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safety
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.
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, planning out
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 which are suitable for every
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 user is
also
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road
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safety
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.
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