"Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?"

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It
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has been said that the minimum legal
age
for driving and riding should be increased so as to improve
road
safety
. Personally, I firmly disagree with
this
idea for two main reasons.
To begin
with, in order to improve
road
safety
, we should emphasize
on
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people’s driving and riding
skills
rather than their
age
. The main reason why there are thousands of traffic accidents is that because the driving tests are too simple, those who do not have standard
skills
still qualify for driving licenses.
For instance
,
although
some teenagers do not have driving licenses, they drive well on the
road
.
However
,some adults are not good at driving
and
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which
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lead to numerous driving accidents.
Consequently
,there is no doubt that young
age
is not always the reason why
roads
is
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unsafe and driving
skills
are the most essential part of
road
safety
. The second reason is that a proper design of
roads
is
essential
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than
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for
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people’s driving
age
. When the
roads
are designed in a strange way,
although
people follow
it
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them
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properly, they still will cause car accidents. Take, Taiwan,
for example
. Taiwan is regarded as
“pedestrian
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a “pedestrian
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hell” by BBC
due to
the fact that pedestrians have to walk closely with vehicles as the government did not design
roads
which are suitable for every
road
user. In conclusion, designing good
roads
for
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user
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is far
important
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more important
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than increasing
minimum
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the minimum
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age
of
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for
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driving. To summarize, as far as I am concerned, I disagree with the idea of rising the legal
age
of
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driving and riding is not useful to improve
road
safety
for two major reasons.
Firstly
,training the public’s driving
skills
before they get their licenses is more effective to improve
road
safety
.
Secondly
, planning out
roads
which are suitable for every
road
user is
also
a key point to help the improvement of
road
safety
.
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