The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table provides information about how many
people
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visiting
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Ashdown
Museum
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for a year after and before the refurbishment.
Then
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, the charts depict the result of surveys from
visitors
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about their
satification
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satisfaction
after going to the
museum
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during the same two periods.
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, it is obvious that a lot of
people
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went to the
museum
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after reconstruction and showed
satification
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satisfaction
from the surveys. During the year before refurbishment, there were only 74.000
people
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visiting the
museum
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.
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number increased significantly by 18.000
visitors
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during the year after refurbishment. It can be seen from the surveys that a lot of
people
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felt dissatisfied in the first period at 40%
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10% of
visitors
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felt very dissatisfied. These percentages decreased dramatically at 15% and 5%
sequently
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sequentially
.
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, there was only 15% of
visitors
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felt very satisfied and 30% satisfied after visiting the
museum
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. These figures jumped by 20% for the former and by 10% for the latter. Meanwhile, there was 5% of
visitors
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giving
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no
respons
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response
for both
of
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periods.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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