Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities ( for example , helping at home or at work ) Others believe that outside of school children should be free to enjoy their lives . Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that all offspring encourage additional responsibilities .
For instance
, apartment cleaning and other
works
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. But others don't agree
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on
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with
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sentence , oppositely , they claim that
chiildren shuold
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children should
be independent. Offspring ought to do extra building services and
thay shuold
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they should
help
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family business
several
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reasons prove
circumstance
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. First of all , globalization and exceeding bad habits may
be alter
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children
's outlook and behaviour. If
children
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time
schedule
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will be full of some kind of house works and
other type
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another type
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of responsibilities they will not be extra time for bad habits. And
parents
have to reward their
children
for their help after that youngsters will understand how they may
be make
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money and the difficulty of earning money and they will not spend their parent's money in vain.
Forexample
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For example
,
parents
may ask
help
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from their
children
taking care of domestic animals and watering flowers or
garden
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. It is not
challangable
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challengeable
work
,but , they will be much more responsible .
Secondly
, high school pupils have to only learn , if they will choose academic life .
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they have to
work
equally with their
parents
or they sometimes
work
part time
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job
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. If they have their own family business youngsters can
work
,
increase
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and increase
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their experience .
For instance
, we have a big greenhouse in our home. I have been working here
almost
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10 years, I think
i
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can easily manage
greenhouse
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a greenhouse
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business. I conclude that
,
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children
should help their
parents
and siblings . If they refuse
these kind
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of home
works
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,
parents
can give they punishment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extra responsibilities
  • develop skills
  • life lessons
  • work ethic
  • sense of responsibility
  • contribute to
  • family
  • community
  • playtime
  • physical development
  • mental development
  • balance
  • enjoyment
  • guide
  • childhood
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