The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003

The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003
Two pie charts illustrate the information on the
energy
produced from six different resources in a country in the
years
1985 and 2003. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
,it can be seen from the charts that
oil
is the most used
energy
in
both
compared
years
,
while
other renewable is used the less in
both
years
. Apparently, the proportion of
oil
takes responsibility for the most
energy
in
this
country,
both
in 1985 and 2003 for 52% and 39% respectively.
According to
oil
data, the
oil
used declined by 11%.
Although
natural gas,coal and nuclear occupy nearly half of all consumed
energy
in two
years
,there have different proportions in
both
charts -in 1985 is 13%, 8% and 22%
while
in 2003 is 23%,22% and 8% respectively.
On the contrary
,
other
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renewable
energy
is occupied the less but the percentage of
this
energy
increased from 1% to 4%. Meanwhile, hydro
energy
remains stable at 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, years, oil, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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