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The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003

The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003
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Two pie charts illustrate the information on the
energy
 produced from six different resources in a country in the
years
 1985 and 2003. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
,it can be seen from the charts that
oil
 is the most used
energy
 in
both
 compared
years
,
while
 other renewable is used the less in
both
years
. Apparently, the proportion of
oil
 takes responsibility for the most
energy
 in
this
 country,
both
 in 1985 and 2003 for 52% and 39% respectively.
According to
oil
 data, the
oil
 used declined by 11%.
Although
 natural gas,coal and nuclear occupy nearly half of all consumed
energy
 in two
years
,there have different proportions in
both
 charts -in 1985 is 13%, 8% and 22%
while
 in 2003 is 23%,22% and 8% respectively.
On the contrary
,
other
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 renewable
energy
 is occupied the less but the percentage of
this
energy
 increased from 1% to 4%. Meanwhile, hydro
energy
 remains stable at 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, years, oil, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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