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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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million
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millions
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 of
visitors
 who stayed on
cruise
ships
 and stayed on
island
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the island
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with
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including
total
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the total
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number
 of received tourists between 2010 and 2017 for a particular
Carribean
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Caribbean
Island
. It can be noticeable that
sum
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the sum
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 of tourists
have
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has
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 shown an upward trend.
While
 had
some
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been some
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fluctations
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fluctuations
on
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in
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 specific years of period,
island
 and
cruise
ships
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ship
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 tenants were supporting
this
 trend generally. In 2010, explorers who preferred to stay on
cruise
ships
 accounted for 0.75
millions
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million
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,
while
its
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their
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 counterparts who pleasured to
spent
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spend
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 their
times
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time
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 on
island
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the island
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was
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were
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 0.25
millions
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million
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. By 2012,
cruise
ships
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ship
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visitors
 saw a slight decrease to the same
number
 where they began.
On the other hand
, for the same period, islander tourists increased moderately by just under 1
millions
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million
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. After 2012,
cruise
ships
have
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apply
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started to attract
majority
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the majority
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 of
visitors
, with
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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 dramatically from 0.5
millions
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million
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 to 2
millions
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million
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 by the end of the examined years. At the same time,
island
 dwellers showed mere small addition
by
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of
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 0.25
millions
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million
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of
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or
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 more.
Total
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A total
The total
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number
 of
visitors
 was exactly accounted for 1 million in 2010.
This
 complete
number
was
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apply
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increased dramatically to 3.5
millions
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million
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 by 2017 with a neglected stabilization between 2015 and 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, cruise, ships, island, number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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