The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates how many shops opened and closed in the period between 2011 and 2018.

Overall

,the number of closures and openings from the very beginning started to decline. At the start, the number of opening

stores

was about 8,500 and closing

stores

was only 6,500.

However

,from 2011 to 2012 opening

markets

sharply declined to 4000,

while

closing

markets

had a slight decrease.Unexpectedly,in 2012

markets

started to climb:and closing shops has it till 2013,after that it started to slow down

while

opening

stores

had a gentle rise from 2012 to 2014.In 2014 two compared

markets

had a significant decline,

however

closing one had it more dramatically

while

opening

stores

had a more gentle decrease than its opponent.

After

this

splash number of closing

markets

started to grow sharply and in one year rocketed from about 500 to about 6500.Next three years of the diagram shops hadn't had any significant splashes,

however

opening

stores

started to decrease gently,

while

closing one continued to grow

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

158 words

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

retail landscape
net growth
market dynamics
economic indicators
fluctuations
pivotal
consumption patterns
e-commerce
brick-and-mortar
downward/upward trend
stabilize
recession
boom
retail sector
closure rate
inauguration/opening rate
consumer market
saturate
commercial viability
profitability

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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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