The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
line chart depicts the figures of questions which were asked by tourists in one city through the period from January to June in 2001.It
clear
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from the graph that a higher number of questions were asked in person.
According to
what is shown,the
Correct quantifier usage
number of enquirer's
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enquirer's
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enquirers
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by telephone
were fluctuated
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during the period from January till March.
Then
it remained
steadily
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from March until April.After
that
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it increased gradually in April
as well as
the following two months.
In addition
,there was a moderate decline in the questions by emails throughout the period from January
till
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may
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.
Then
it maintained the same level which was just below 400.The
numbers
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number
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of
in person
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in-person
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enquirer's
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enquirers
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grow
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rapidly and it reached it is peak nearly just over 1800 in June .
To sum up
,we could say that the numbers of
in person
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in-person
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enquirer's
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enquirers
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were
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was
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the highest through six months in 2001.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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