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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent
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The line graph illustrates the information about how many
visitors
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 travelled
a
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Caribbean
Island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
According to
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 the line chart, the total number of tourists visiting a Caribbean
Island
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 rose significantly during the whole period.
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 the beginning, there were 1
million
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visitors
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 in 2010. The number of total tourists doubled to 2
million
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 in 2013. It grew slightly in the following year. And a plateau between 2015 to 2016.
Then
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 It reached a peak of 3.5
million
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of
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visitors
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 in 2017. There were two particular places where people stayed on
Caribbean
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a Caribbean
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island
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islands
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, cruise ships and the
island
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. With an initial, staying on ships in 2010 ,0.25
million
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, was less than the
island
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, over 0.6
million
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. The figure of
visitors
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 staying on boats had minimally fluctuated from 2010 to 2013, which was under half a
million
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. It climbed modesty from 1
million
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 in 2014 to 2
million
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 in 2017, which replaced the position, more than staying on the
island
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.
On the other hand
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, the number of living on the
island
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 gradually rose to 1.5
million
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.
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