Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephones at their homes for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons

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Nowadays,a high number of people use the best of technologies
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as computers,laptops and telephones at home for work and
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business.I think
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this
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telecommunication is harmful to our health,the advantages outweigh the disadvantages for the below reasons.
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,by online
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labor
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we would be able to work very well and calmly from far distances and
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we will not complain about the position that our career
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.
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,online shops help too many shopkeepers who want to transfer their goods and cargo all over the country since 1980.
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,it is very effective for an introverted person to work beyond human communications involving businesses and large social gatherings
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the reason that they are more prone to spend their
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time alonely.
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, it was very tough and time-consuming for a solitary to choose a job in society and ,usually they got annoyed before the birth of virtual performance
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so that
they became very comfortable
to do
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it in their room far away from others.
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,by distance
employment
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we would rather devote a little of our time to leisure activities with our family.
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, during the
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two decades,men hung out with their
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wives
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more than past and the heart to heart relations was inclined between couples.
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,in my opinion, computer or mobile working is a helpful way to earn money near being comfortable despite there
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some tiny drawbacks behind it but the benefits are more remarkable.
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