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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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In recent days, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of children who do not prefer studying
science
subjects
 at the university level in almost all parts of the globe. There are a number of reasons why
this
 is happening. In
this
 essay, I will depict them and will
also
 present a deluge of effects associated with
this
 issue. The most telling reason why
science
subjects
 are losing their popularity among university goers lies in the fact that
subjects
 related to
science
, namely genetics, aeronautical engineering, biochemistry, and environmental
science
, are time and energy-consuming.
As a result
, most of the students are not able to
enroll
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 in other extracurricular activities, ultimately affecting their physical and mental health.
Besides
this
, these
subjects
 are continuously evolving with some new discoveries and inventions made every now and
then
 which can change the credibility of previously acquired knowledge. One of the most telling consequences associated with the issue is that without the graduates undertaking
this
 stream of study, we might face a dearth of doctors, engineers, environmentalists, and astronauts all of which will ultimately affect the progression of human civilization. Not only, the life-threatening disease can swipe the entire population if it's the hard work of doctors and scientists, but
also
 the universe might be hit by some unexplained disturbances from outer space.
Besides
this
, the technological innovations that have made our life convenient, without them the quality of life will be hampered.
To sum up
, varied reasons have given rise to the diminishing popularity of
science
subjects
,
thus
 I firmly believe that given the potential impacts of THE TOPIC, until we develop a more nuanced approach, in which success in coping with
this
 issue is contingent on, all our efforts will go awry, if not in vain.
Nevertheless
, I feel that a dearth of investment in
science
 will have a far-reaching impact not only on the individual but
also
 on the cumulative productivity of society.
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