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some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #punishments #offences #traffic #accidents #measures #road #safety
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The saying “better late than never” appears surprisingly suited for describing those that rather break the
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 rules than prioritize their own safety, which
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 results in avoidable heat-breaking accidents. To tackle
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 argue that the application of strict
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 plays
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 key role; meanwhile, others believe that there should be more effective solutions other than that. From my perspective, I go for the former proposal since it provides two-fold benefits to both the authority and its citizens. At first glance, strict
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 minimize the likelihood of the incident happening
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 second time. When witnessing
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 accident happening right in front of them, or in the worst case, they are the
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 later punished strictly, their awareness of the need to seriously abide by
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 rules will deeply increase so as to always guarantee their own safety first no matter what.
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, the strict
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 not only damage part of their well-being when it comes to the not-so-well-off
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 seriously stain one’s reputation down the road, especially if he/she belongs to the high demography.
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, the by-products,
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 as the huge amount of money from fining law-breakers, could contribute to solving a wide range of domestic issues. As an old Chinese saying goes “a journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step”, the method of solving a nagging problem from the right beginning should likely bear fruition,
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which increasing the level of difficulty in driving exams and raising awareness about
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 safety cannot be overlooked. If there were more complicated questions related to requiring problem-solving skills when it comes to the written part and so as the practical one, there would be fewer
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 having driving licenses permitting them to join in the road on their own potentially life-threatening vehicles; yet those managing to pass would be truly law-abiding.
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,
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, especially young children, should be well-informed about the
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 rules as early as possible. Psychologically speaking,
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 are usually only convinced by things that have direct impacts on them;
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, it is advisable to mainly focus on explaining how committing
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 offences can have negative effects directly on the sake of theirs. In recapitulation, either applying strict
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 or combining different other measures would help in one way or another to address the issue of
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 offences. From my personal perspective, I believe the former solution would produce much faster yet more fruitful results. After all, we should always give our life the top priority, regardless of any
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. Isn’t it still better to be able to start from scratch than never
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 able to?
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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