In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

There are many numbers of
people
living in a
house
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renting these days all over the world. I prefer borrowing
the
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house
because it has some good merits for saving big
money
than buying a
house
. But
also
there are several demerits of
this
subject. In
this
essay, I will discuss
benefits
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the benefits
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and analyse the reason
of
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the importance of renting houses adding some negative
points
also
.
First,
the main reason
of
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living by rental is that
the
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house
rental is
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a significantly
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significantly
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economic
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way to prevent spending big
money
at once. It is
also
good for
people
who didn't save
the
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money
regularly but needs a
house
to live
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soon as possible. So average
people
prefer
this
way for their living. And
this
method is
also
helpful to save
money
steadily.
In addition
, there
is
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clear merits for buying
house
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a house
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doesn't need to pay
amount
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of taxes. If someone has
a
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real estate, anyway there is no choice
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spend a lot of
money
.
People
are usually pay
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other bills as well so they don't want to get asked for extra bills.
Furthermore
, it is very
convinient
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convenient
for individuals to move their address.
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we
faced
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to
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the situation of changing jobs or schools
by
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personal reasons, rental habitats can move out faster than
house
owners. Like
this
, there are some reasons and good
points
of living by using rental services. But the small
problems
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problem
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of not being
a
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owner of
house
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a house
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is the duration of living is limited. And there
is
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also
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the possibilities
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possibilities
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of meeting a bad
house
owner. At some
points
, some big or small problems could
be
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occured
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occur
. In conclusion, even
few
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negative
points
are exist
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but in my opinion, for
the
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people
of average level, the chance to borrow
the
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house
comes to become a
conbinient
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convenient
and flexible way to live. If we try to prepare the process of rental services well we can make the negative
points
decrease as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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