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Some people think that the best essy to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or ridind motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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increase
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road
saftey
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safety
,in order to make our safer for
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driving
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 few masses opine that extending the minimum
age
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 of driving aids to
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road
saftey
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safety
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 that
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goverment
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government
 should
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awarding
childrean
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children
 at early
ages
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. TO commence with
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,by no means it is
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age
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 driving because 18 is the
age
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the
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youngsters are ready to ride
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 and
car
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cars
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 perfectly,
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their
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 are some adults who drive very
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reckless
restless
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 can
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introduce
intoduce
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introduce
 some strict laws as wells focus to educate the
childrean
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children
 at school level helps to reduce the threat
due
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 improper driving.To
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exemplify
,In many
country
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 like
USA
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the USA
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 mentors
aware
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are aware
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 their student about traffic rules and driving which helps
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youngs
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young
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 to understand the threat and drive safely.
on the other hand
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
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increase
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 the minimum
age
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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