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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ART (EX. PAINTING, MUSIC, POETRY, ETC.) CAN BE MADE BY EVERYONE WHEREAS OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT CAN ONLY BE MADE BY THOSE WITH SPECIAL ABILITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Art
 is very important to our society for a long time ago. It's already there in our culture before we are even born. In
this
 essay. I will talk about my views and opinion on
this
 matter. On one hand, in my opinion.
Art
 is for everybody who likes to try drawing or painting and even try to pursue music and poetry. Because
art
 definitely has many benefits for people and
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society and it can release stress and make people happy. For ,example my daughter very much likes to learn and perform piano and guitar now, because I buy one for him. Before she always plays online games on his cellphone, but now his attention is diverting to playing a musical instrument.
On the other hand
,
Art
 is not for everybody, for
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reason you cannot excel in what kind of
art
 you're into it and,if you don't have the ability, talent and dedication to pursue it.
For example
, our neighbour in the Philippines really trying hard to follow in the footsteps of his father, because his father is a good musician, but until now he didn't learn music even if he started at a young age. In my conclusion, I believe
art
 is for everybody. Regardless of your status, or even if you are only an average learner of the craft that you try to pursue.
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  • self-expression
  • emotional release
  • storytelling
  • formal training
  • lasting value
  • impact
  • subjective nature
  • inclusivity
  • modern art movements
  • non-professional artists
  • recognition
  • expertise
  • dedication
  • anecdotal experiences
  • art education
  • inherent potential
  • structured learning
  • artistic excellence
  • creativity
  • talent
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