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The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas

The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas
#process #storage #area #canvas
This
 diagram illustrates
the
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information regarding the process of making a storage area from a material known as concrete canvas.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there are total
8
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steps in
this
 diagram.
However
,all the steps are mandatory in
this
 process.
While
 making
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a cancav
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cancav
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cancer
cancel
need
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needs
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 significant materials
such
 as
van
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a van
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,
wrapp
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wrap
wrapped
,machinery and water etc.
Firstly
,bricks should be
manufacturing
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 with three component
such
as
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Fibrous top surface,Dry concrete,
Waterproof
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and Waterproof
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 layer.
Secondly
,they are delivered by
the
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van.
Thirdly
,they are unwrapping the stuff and spreading
on
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it on
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 the ground in
the
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an
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 area of 10 metres and they tie
with
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it with
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 the rope
as well as
putting
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put
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 pegs in the corner.
On the other
hand
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 they
using
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use
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 the Pumping Air machinery they put
Airpump
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in Airpump
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 and make it underground as they put Door as well.
While
 they built
thr
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the
 storage
until
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to
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 8 meters and
giving
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gave
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 the Watering.
Additionally
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 it took to
setting
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set
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 down to 20 -24 hours after that it is ready to
storing
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store
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 bricks.
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