🔶More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. 🔸What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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prefer to lead a healthy life by doing

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fitness activities

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because they know the idea of being healthier. Few

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not wish to concentrate on their

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. I completely agree with

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to do physical activities on daily basis. First of all, If you are willing to

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, for that you need to take a

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diet, it has a lot of benefits. As we know that

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proteins

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blocks of muscles,

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healthy food brings you

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positive energy to face illness. Food is the essential source for our body and there are lost foods like

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and which

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inorganic, but we have to take a decision whether we are consuming

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meal or not. Another important reason is to stay healthy for a longer period of time.

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regular workouts which

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we can clearly see that our respiratory system improves a lot

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in our body if

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concentrate on

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. In conclusion, Leading a healthy life keeps you motivated throughout your life and makes you bold enough to fight against

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🔶More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. 🔸What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

Fully explain your ideas

Today, more and more people are leaving rural areas to live in the city. Discuss some effects of rural recession and the cause of this

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your Opinion about this?

Currently, majority of people are willing to travel around the world to visit the sight seeying places because it is much more easier now as apposed to past. There are several benefits of tourism and there are outweigh the drawbacks.

Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The money spent by governments on space programmers would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?