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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many
people
 agree with the idea of having the same opinion as their friends could lead to a positive relationship
due to
 avoid conflict,
while
 others think in the opposite
way
 justifying their answer by explaining that having differences in their opinions could be a positive
way
 to enrich their friendship and create a strong bound. There are individuals who prefer to have a connection with others who think the same
way
 as them,
moreover
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 I see these
people
 as if they have their minds close to new opinions and are not willing to listen to new ideas. I believe that
this
 group of humans only who only circulate around other humans thinking the same
way
 as they are, it makes them feel a lack of new ideas or opinions and lets them think that everyone is wrong. I personally think by making and creating
this
 type of friendship is not healthy and in
the
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 long
way
, it will create a conflict between the
people
 involved.
For example
, there are moments when someone has a different point of view or just decided to change their mind at some point, and it is here when those
people
, the ones that are your friends, decided to kick you out because now you think differently.
On the other hand
, there are
people
 who think that having a friendship with others thinking differently than you could be better and I personally agree with
this
. Even though thinking differently could sometimes lead to discussions, there are moments when it allows
people
 to open their minds to different points of view and let
people
 connect with an inner part of each person: respect and empathy, meaning that if the other thing differently than I, still could be my friend.
To conclude
, the most important thing is to build and create bounds it does not matter whether thinking differently or not.
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