Some people believe that advertisement persue them to buy thing, others think that they do not mind it.Both view and your opinion.

Now a days
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Nowadays
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,
advertisement
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advertisements
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play a significant role in our life. few
people
believe that advertising on
the
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television
tempt
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tempts
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people
to buy things.
However
, some
people
make sure that it would not be necessary to get a random product.
This
essay will discuss both
the
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my
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views and my opinion regarding
advertisement
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advertisements
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in the upcoming passage. There are several reason
people
say the
advertisement
made
people
to
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apply
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buy them.
To begin
with, whenever there is a mega
sales
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sale
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they will you
lot
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a lot
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of discounts and offers. Which made
people
to
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apply
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fell
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feel
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towards
price
rather than
usage
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the usage
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of the products.
For example
, if they offer 30
percent
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per cent
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discount sales on household products, humans prefer to buy it even though it is not needed because of its lower
price
and to
use
it in future.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, we can clearly see
that
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attraction of the ad
which
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apply
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tempt
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tempts
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people
to make a decision to buy. The posters are designed in
such
way
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a way
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that
attract
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attracts
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citizens especially, kids whenever they show an
advertisement
regarding toys which
attract
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attracts
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kids and they compel their parents to buy that product. These may be the reason why
people
are
tempting
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tempted
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towards attractive advertisements.
On the other hand
, few
people
are clever because they will not buy any random things. These are good decisions even we can save
a
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money for
futher
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further
use
.
Firstly
, the requirements of the
items
whether
it
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they
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could be useful or not. We need to ensure the necessity of the
items
before
pursue
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pursuing
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them because some of the
items
would not be cheap and
also
it does not
last
long enough.
Secondly
,
main
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the main
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concern
about
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is about
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the
price
of the item. some of the
product
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products
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may
be once
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be once used
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use
only and the
price
tag is higher than normal
due to
its
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their
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brand value, clever
people
go for the cheapest one rather than buying that. Before we go for it we need to ensure for our sake. In my opinion. I prefer to check the necessity of the
items
and if
i
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I
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need
it
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them
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for my daily
use
then
I like to buy,
otherwise
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,otherwise
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I would not go for it. In conclusion,
this
essay has discussed that
people
are falling towards
the
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discounts rather than checking
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the
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value for
the
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apply
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money.
Athough
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Although
few
people
are clever to take a decision.
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