The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the plans of an industrial area in
the
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Norbiton town at present and after future changes
of
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the
site
.
Overall
, it is apparent that industrial
area
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will be demolished completely and houses will be built
instead
of
factory
buildings. In the planned future development
site
, a school will be built
at
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the
right hand
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side
ot
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of
the
map
in the place of a
factory
building.
A long
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the
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road
which connects the school to the
centre
square
, three housing blocks will be built in the place of four
factory
buildings beside
the
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each side of the
road
.
Moreover
, an avenue will be created to connect a newly built playground in the
north-eastern
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northeastern
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part of the
map
near the river. At
northern
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the northern
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part of the
map
,
a high-rise flats
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a high-rise flat
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will be built and a
road
will be constructed to join the housing to the
centre
square
of the
map
.
Furthermore
, a bridge will be provided to cross the mentioned
road
over the river. In the new street, after the bridge to the south, a housing block will be constructed. Some amenities
such
as a Medical
centre
will be created at the
south east
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southeast
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of the
centre
square
.
Besides
, a
factory
site
in the
south west
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southwest
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of the
centre
square
will be replaced by shops. As a
last
change
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chance
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, a smaller
square
will be added to the south of the main
square
in
the
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conjuction
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conjunction
with the main
road
of the
site
wich
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which
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lie
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in the south part of the
sites
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site
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from east to west.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words site, factory, map, road, centre, square with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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