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Space travel is fantastic these days, but there are many issues, such as environmental problems, that we should be focusing on. What are your views on the allocation of public funding?

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Travelling to space is trending these days, but environment and funding are
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creating some problems.
This
 essay will focus on both the issues and solutions for the same. Nowadays many
scienctist
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scientists
scientist
 are interested to find
the
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life
in
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 another planet and
hence
 they
wants
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 to travel to space, but
this
 can create a problem
to
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earth's
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the earth's
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surronding
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surrounding
surroundings
 and financial issues
to
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the
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humans. To go
for
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the
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search
of
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 lives
in
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other planet
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, more and more time and energy
is
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 required to spend on the process.
This
 process may
effect
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 our environment,
for instance
, when
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scientist
launch
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the
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 rocket, it
produce
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the
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balck
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black
 smoke. In the making of that rocket, lots of finance is required, and government take
this
 money from the taxes paid by the citizens.
For example
, in
future
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 if they are planning to go to space, they will work on the budget and
than
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 they will recover the same amount from the citizens. Some possible
solutions
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 to
this
 problem are protecting the climate by launching
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rockets in
such
surrondings
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surroundings
 which are far from human beings.
Instead
 of recovering the budget amount from the public,
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government should start a kind of scheme where people can donate if they want to or else they should ask for the help at international level.
To conclude
,
Environment
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 and people should not be
effected
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affected
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, but still
country
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 should be developed
simultaneaously
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simultaneously
.
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