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These days people are using the Internet for shopping, work and to communicate with others without the need for face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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Technology has developed to a great extent that it has changed and influenced mankind.
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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 is a remarkable achievement by
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technological experts, where
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globalization has made us feel, that
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the whole
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 world is
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 our
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, unlike the old days
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when
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,
people
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 had to physically move and reach for the respective
other person
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another person
other people
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 to buy
goods
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, talk and get a job done. In
this
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the advantages
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 of
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 sort of development outweigh its disadvantages.
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, we now live in a competitive and globalized world where,
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time
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the time
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 has become a crucial factor, unlike
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 old days. It is evident and inevitable that,
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the use
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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 has caused to save a lot of
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of
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for
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 individuals, provided that they know how to use it.
For instance
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,
human-beings
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human beings
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 can do online shopping,
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and communication
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communication
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communicate
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 via social media platforms. Some
of
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the
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employment opportunities are based on the
intenet
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internet
,
while
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 most
others
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 jobs cannot survive without
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internet
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the internet
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. As an example, imagine a situation in an office where
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 employees have to hand deliver hundreds of letters to the recipients each day!
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Internet
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The Internet
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 has caused
to
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us to
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 reduce the
time
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 immensely where we can send emails, or social media texts, where we can provide information without meeting the person.
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, consider the cost we need to bare as an example; transport cost etc, if it is mandatory to meet up
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with the
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 related person, where we need to buy
goods
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 or to communicate. As an example, nowadays we can select electronic items, everyday
goods
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 or even clothes, and those items might be at our doorstep in no
time
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 without costing much transport charge, where it would take days to meet merchants and let the job done if we do not have
internet
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.
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, we may end up tiring ourselves, without having efficiency.
On the other hand
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, there might be negative impacts
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 of
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 advancements as well. The lack of
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face-to-face
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 intercommunication might produce, "robot-type"
people
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where
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who
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they
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do not possess humanity.
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,
people
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 may get trapped
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in
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 fake items and
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genuine
goods
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 will lose their trade as well.
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, negative impacts have to be well addressed and more scrutinized procedures must be adapted to make
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internet
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the internet
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 more
benificial
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beneficial
 rather than
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 as a tool. In conclusion, if individuals can filter and figure
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occassions
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occasions
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internet
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 should be used and not,
people
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 may mostly achieve the true benefit of
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internet
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the internet
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while
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, human face-to-face communication in necessary situations.
Therefore
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,
people
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 are the ones who need to choose the right balance between
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the uses
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uses
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use
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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 and human intercommunication physically.
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