IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2

Museums should display art of their own country or they should display art from all our the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#museums #display #art #country #world
museums and art galleries are very crucial to
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
hold the ancient culture and their art .
This
 can make
very
Correct article usage
a very
show examples
 good revenue model
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the region and it can provide employment to the people . first of all, museums
displays
Change the verb form
display
show examples
 the art,sculptures,
monuments
Correct word choice
and monuments
show examples
 of our ancient folks that
gives
Change the verb form
give
show examples
 us a great
explosure
Correct your spelling
exposure
 towards
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
history. The younger generations will get to know the advancement of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
civilization.
portraiying
Correct your spelling
portraying
 the arts of other countries can bring the
experinece
Correct your spelling
experience
 of knowing that country well without even physically visiting the place.
secondly
 , the
governemnt
Correct your spelling
government
 should ask permission for the displaying of other regional
artifacts
Change the spelling
artefacts
show examples
 and sculptures in the museum.
This
 will improve the understanding of other
countries
Change noun form
countries'
country's
show examples
 history and culture without even going to that foreign land.
Furthermore
, displaying the arts of
other region
Change the wording
another region
other regions
show examples
 can improve the cross
culture
Replace the word
cultural
show examples
 nature that
bring
Change the verb form
brings
show examples
 us to adopting to the new systems easily. In conclusion
its
Replace the word
it's
it is
show examples
 better to encourage the different nations to provide
there
Replace the word
their
show examples
 arts to other nations. it is beneficial to the country and
there
Correct your spelling
their
show examples
pupil
Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
show examples
 to diversify and understand
there
Replace the word
their
show examples
 fellow residencies far
more
Change the word
apply
show examples
better.
Submitted by dasarisaikrishna95 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: