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Fewer and fewer young people choose to become a teacher. Why do young people do not want to become teachers? How could this be changed?

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Very few youngsters opt to become educators nowadays. Many reasons contribute to
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 global trend. In the following paragraphs, we will be exploring why people are hesitant to pursue teaching as a career option and some suggestions on how to change
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. It is evident that there is a variety of career options to choose from these days compared to the old days. Graduates are fascinated by these blue-collar or white-collar jobs which offer attractive pay packages
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 opportunities to travel onsite and other benefits.
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 most lecturers globally are underpaid and overloaded with work. Another cause for
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 trend is because of the difficult behaviour exhibited especially by high school students.
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 indecent and arrogant attitude often demotivates the teaching staff as they are forced to deal with
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 behaviour on a daily basis.
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 in turn affects the mental health of teachers and many of them choose to resign from
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 profession.
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, there are several approaches we can take to reverse
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 ongoing trend. Government should take the initiative to ensure the faculty are well paid based on their experience.
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, they should
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 be provided with other benefits like rent allowances, and life and medical insurance.
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, there should
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 be a restriction maintained on the number of students handled by each teacher.
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 in turn helps to reduce the workload on individual staff and
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 increases the demand for the teaching profession.
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, educators play an important role in shaping the future generation. As a society, we should encourage young people to follow their passion and take steps to glamorize the teaching profession. Government should mandate institutions to provide a suitable work environment ensuring the physical and mental health of teachers and provide additional benefits which attract young students to pursue a career in the education field.

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