Some people believe that education success mostly depends on teachers. Others however say that it depends more on the attitude of student and their willingness to study. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Education is an integral part of both
student
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students
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and
teacher
's life and personality.
Students
are like the clay which an instructor uses to mould into beautiful
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poetry
. So,
according to
some people,
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plays an inevitable part in deciding a scholar's future.
On the other hand
, some argue that
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student
who's
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dedication and interest in
studies
made him succeed. My opinion lies towards
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pivotal role in building
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future.
Firstly
, considering the fact of
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intent to study, a tutor cannot succeed in making a topper out of a random
student
until the
student
has his/her full devotion to the
studies
.
For instance
, my younger brother got his
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coaching
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and
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tuition
from
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one of the
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tutor for his grade 12 chemistry and biology exams. He had no
intentions
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to carry on these subjects in the near future because he was interested in maths only. He got average marks in both chemistry and biology despite being coached
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best
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option
avaialble
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available
at that time.
Hence
, it is evident that
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dedication is
must
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.
On the other hand
, we cannot completely ignore the major role
teacher
plays in building the best in
students
.
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of the
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existence
of the educational institution depends on the
teacher
. Sometimes, pupils tend not to like
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particular
majors in their
studies
but when they get enrolled and tutored,
then
they start mastering them with the
teacher
's influence. For most
of
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the
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students
,
techers
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teachers
are
the
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role models and their whole educational journey
rely
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on them.
Moreover
, a perfectly mastered
teacher
in their particular
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knows how to balance the
teacher
-
student
relationship.
According to
a study conducted
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Delhi University in India, a
teacher
who knows how to do his job perfectly will always roll out
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success rate in the classroom. At
last
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want to say that no matter how
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a
student
is toward
studies
but
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is the only person, who can make
this
thing possible. Different tutors have their distinctive traits to deal with
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the
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students
had to rely on a
teacher
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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