Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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in the world is rising every year.
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of
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violence
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of different types of crimes
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the wide gap between poor and rich
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, which affects the access that
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has to basic needs.
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, the lack of education left many young
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without any
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to find a decent job or trade.
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of
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the crime of hate, both are related to conservative societies and an
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inequality
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, Woman UN has shared a survey which shows that the more unequal a country is, the biggest
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and crimes it has. From my point of
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there are two ways to solve these problems.
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countries need a
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variety
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that give access to young
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to formal education or work training,
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they can build skills that allow them to find jobs and be able to cover their basic needs.
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, all the countries have to fight
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against
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violence
and
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discriminatory
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LGTBQ+
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with educational
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available in primary and
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secondary
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, since 2022 Argentina is implemented
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of educational
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to prevent
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, with those they try to
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cultivate
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with diverse identities. To sum
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main problems with the
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of crime
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poverity
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poverty
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and hate
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,
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however
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this
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can be tackled through
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government
and educational
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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