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Ielts Writing Task 1: Internet users as percentage of population 1999 - 2009

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The given graph illustrates the
proportion
 of people who used the
internet
 in the US, Canada and
Mexico
from
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 1999 and 2009
Overall
, it is obvious that the percentage of people using the
internet
 witnessed an increase in all
of
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the 3 countries, and Canada saw the most significant growth in
internet
 usage.
Also
, the
proportion
 of Mexican
users
 was the lowest during the given period. In 1999, among the 3 countries, the percentage of people having access to the
Internet
 in America was the highest, at about 20%, and those in Canada and
Mexico
 were about 10% and 5%, respectively. 2005 experienced a considerable surge to 70% in both the
proportion
 of Canadian
users
 and that of American
users
,
whereas
, a slight climb to 25% was seen in the figure for
Mexico
 during the period of 6 years. From 2005 to 2009, the
proportion
 of
internet
users
 in all
of
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the 3 countries increased steadily. By 2009, nearly 100%
Canadians
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of Canadians
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 used the
internet
 whilst the figure for America was 80%, twice as high as that for
Mexico
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