Many working people get liitle or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. why do many working people not get enough excercise? what can be done about this problem?

In the modern world, many
workers
do not go to the gym or practice any kind of sport which affect their
wellbeing
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,
such
as their mental
health
and their body.
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essay will first suggest the lack of
time
as a key element of why
people
do not practice any exercise and it will tha state that the
reduce
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of
work
hours
could help to solve
this
problem. These days adults
work
more than
forty five
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hours
per week,
whereas
their busy
life styles
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lifestyles
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,
such
as family, business
meeting
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meetings
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, etc. do not allow them to have a lot of
time
off.
Addicionally
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Additionally
,
people
now do home office, which
make
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them be at home every day and all day long,
thus
workers
do not move or do any kind of exercise during the week.
Due to
their busy
life
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they
also
eat unhealthy food. During
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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crisis,
an
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important research about
this
problem found that 60
percentage
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of
people
have started to have
health
problems
such
as diabetes and obesity. With
the
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regard
of
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the question about how to find solutions to
this
problem, I personally consider that
reduce
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work
hours
or
make
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shorter
work
weeks could help to prevent
many
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kind
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of
health
problems. The
technlogy
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technology
could help us to improve
working
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process which will allow us to have more free
time
for
workers
. In fact, there are many examples in different
caountries
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countries
that shows that working
less
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hours
is better for creativity and generates more
revenues
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for
the
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companies. For
intance
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instance
, Spain implemented four working days as a trial
since
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two years ago, and the results have been fantastic, with a reduction
of
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obesity. Even though the companies were not happy at the begging
,
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when they saw the rise in their productivity they were
also
happy. In conclusion, busy
life styles
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lifestyles
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and long
hours
of
work
do not allow
people
free
time
to do sport or be outdoors, which directly
affect
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their
health
,
therefore
we suggest that reduce
work
hours
will allow
workers
to have more
time
for
excercise
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exercise
and take care of
them self
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themself
themselves
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.
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