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The picture show process of making wool. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

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The diagram describes the procedure by which
wool
 is manufactured.
Overall
, the process consists of 12 steps, starting with selecting suitable sheep and finishing with the
yarn
 being knitted or
being
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made into jackets or carpets.
Firstly
, the sheep are gathered to get their fleece sheared. After being washed with water and chemicals, the fleece is taken into the dryer to be blown dry.
Then
, the dried fleece is carded using a carding machine. Part of them is carded into
wool
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a wool
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 string and
then
 later
be
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recycled
while
 the other part is made into tufts of
wool
. In the next step, tufts of
wool
 are transported to a workshop for storage.
Then
, these
wool
 tufts are
spinned
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spun
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 into balls of
yarn
 in order to sell
for
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to
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 customers.
Subsequently
, these balls of
yarn
 are used for different purposes, depending on the customers. These
yarn
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yarns
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 can be used for knitting projects by individuals or be made into jackets or carpets in factories.
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