You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The chart displays how many
books
were read by men and women between the years 2011 to 2014 in a Public Library called Burnaby.
Overall
, the line graph shows that both, males and
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females
, had read the same amount of
books
from 2011 to 2013,
however
, in the middle of 2013 the
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families
line graph drop down from 10.000
books
to a bit more than 6.000
books
. The most
noticiable
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noticeable
trend is that the number of
books
that men read has
been
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risen gradually from approximately 2.500 in 2011 to 2012,
whereas
from that year
this
figure rose sharply from 4.000 to 14.000
books
.
In contrast
, the number of
books
that women read
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gradually from approximately 4.500
to10.000
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to 10,000
between the years 2011-2013, but
this
amount registered a big change in 2013 and fell drastically
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from
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, 10.000
books
to 6.000 approximately.
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