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Q. The government should ban smoking in all public places, even though this would restrict some other people's freedoms. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

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There is no doubt that smoking is harmful to
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 and banning public smoking has become a prominent issue.
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 some
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 believe that smoking should be prohibited in public areas, others believe that it should not because it harms
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's self-independence. I firmly agree with the situation of banning public smoking because it is essential for the well-being of
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. States are very much concerned about public
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 and several
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 issues are associated with smoking
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 as asthma and even cancer.
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, smoking not harms the person who directly inhales the nicotine and other harmful ingredients but the others who come in contact with the smoker
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 smoking. As in public places, there are several means of
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 like children, elderly adults, patients or pregnant mothers.
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, smoking should be prohibited in public places for them.
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, smokers disturbed the non-smokers because of the smoke and irritating smell of the cigarettes. A recent study demonstrates that, if public smoking cannot be controlled it could create an impact on public
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 and even encourages non-smokers to start smoking which is very alarming.
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, some
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 believe that
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 the prohibition of public smoking rejects
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's independence which should not be tolerated. But public freedom is a mere excuse if it is all about public
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, there are so many steps the State can take to ensure public freedom rather than permitting public smoking,
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, giving them freedom of speech.
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, if the government wants to make
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 healthy and sound, the prohibition of public smoking is a must.
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, I am firmly on the point of banning smoking in the public. It would help to build a healthy environment for all ages and all kinds of
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