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The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

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The picture below describes the mechanism of
acid
rain
 caused by
pollutants
 from modern life contaminating the environment and food chain. In general, there are 3 main processes where
acid
rain
 occurs.
At
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 the first step,
pollutants
 vapour
to
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into
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 the sky and absorb by the
clouds
.
The
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 next process, the contaminated cloud laden with
pollutants
 will drop the
acid
rain
 when it is heavy enough. And
last
 part,
the
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acid
rain
 could fall into the food chain area. There are many
pollutants
 caused by
the
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acid
rain
,
such
 as carbon dioxide, sulphur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury, and other compounds. Those particles came from several resources like housing, transportation, factories, and power stations.
While
 the toxic waste rises, it will be absorbed by
clouds
.
This
 process caused the
clouds
 laden with
the
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pollutants
. In the next part, the polluted
clouds
 can move by
cross
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 another country or continents and stop above the food
chain
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chains
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 area
such
 as land with trees and plants, hills and fields, rivers, and lakes. In the end, when the
clouds
 are heavy enough,
it
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they
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 will drop
the
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acid
rain
 and contaminate
the
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nature.
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