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The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.
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The diagram illustrates how pollution
turn
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turns
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 into
acid
rain
 and impacts the environment including
food
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the food
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 chain in
this
 modern era.
Overall
, it is noticeable that there are ten steps that occur, starting from the pollution made
from
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by
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 houses, transportation, factories, and power stations.
Although
 it all would be transformed
to
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into
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acid
rain
 falls and affecting the food chains.
The first step is
 when the houses, transport, factories and power stations result in
the
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apply
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carbon dioxide, sulfur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury, and other components that will be absorbed by the clouds.
Next,
after all, pollution is absorbed well in the cloud and the polluted cloud is ready to be sent across the countries and continents before transforming into
acid
rain
 falls.
Furthermore
,
acid
rain
 falls into the grounds and showers all the hills and fields,
then
 turns into
the
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trees and plants, rivers and lakes, which can affect the food chain.
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