Rich Countries Often Give Money To Poorer Countries, But It Does Not Solve Poverty. Therefore, Developed Countries Should Give Other Types Of Help To The Poor Countries Rather Than Financial Aid. To What Extent Do You Agree Or Disagree?

Most
of
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people
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the people
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say that rich
countries
usually give
money
to poorer
countries
, but it does not solve poverty,
therefore
developed
countries
should give other types of help to the poor
countries
rather than financial aid. In my opinion,
i
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agree with
this
statement because the
long term
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benefit will help poor
countries
develop and
developed
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countries
gain more
advantage
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advantages
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.
Firstly
, when developed
countries
give
money
to
undevelop
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undeveloped
countries
, it will help
citizen
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in
this
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countries
to solve
shorterm
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problem
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problems
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and it is not
last
long. When inhabitants in poor
countries
receive
money
from
donation
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donations
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, they will pay the temporary cost or something that they must have.
For example
, in 2005, United State donated
for
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population
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the population
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in undeveloped
countries
about 20 billion each country, but it only
help
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people solve
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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in 2 months, after two months , they
were continue
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poorly.
Secondly
,
instead
of giving
money
for
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poorer
countries
, the developed
countries
can make more
opportunity
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opportunities
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jobs
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for jobs
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for inhabitants. From
this
, not only people can get
money
to pay
cost
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the cost
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of living, but
also
it
make
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more benefit to business of developed
countries
.
For example
, in Vietnam, there are
a
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big
numbers
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number
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of
foreign
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a foreign
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company
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,
it
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make more jobs for employment
in
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all
level
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,
beside
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, there are helping Vietnam more and more development and foreign
countries
, too.
Overview
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, helping poorer
by
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financial aid is
good
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a good
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thing, but it will help them solve
short term
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problems.
Instead
of helping
is
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in
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right
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the right
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way, it will make more
benefit
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for them and for yourself
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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