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Fast food industry is having negative effects on our health?Do you agree or disagree?

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Consuming instant
food
 is having negative impacts on our
health
. Yes, I agree that takeaway
food
 is attracting consumers and creating an imbalance in our
health
. I will discuss my view in the essay. On one hand, in today's fast-paced and technology-driven lifestyle, people have limited time to take care of themselves.
Due to
 the highly stressful life, individuals opt for fast
food
. Consuming take-away foods brings a high risk to our
health
,
such
 as cancers, cardiac problems, obesity etc. It is considered to be a fact that there are a lot of unhygienic methods used for cooking.
On the other hand
, the use of raw materials in
such
 restaurants is not of advisable quality.
Also
, they use ingredients
such
 as soda in the
food
 to make it tastier, which is negative for our
health
. Many raw materials, namely oil, spices etc are re-used multiple times. Consuming
such
 foods increase the
health
 risk both in adults
as well as
 children.
However
,
due to
 the sophisticated and stress-filled life, it is challenging to maintain a work-life balance.
Hence
, individuals consider adopting fast
food
 in their daily lives. People who are away from their homes, too much work pressure, working late, a neutral family system etc all are the reasons to go for convenience
food
.
Nevertheless
, they are numerous ways to look for a solution to stay healthy.
To conclude
,
although
, the fast
food
 industry is growing it is
also
 inviting a lot of
health
 issues. Personally, I think it is risky to adopt convenience
food
.
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