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Fast food industry is having negative effects on our health?Do you agree or disagree?

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Consuming instant
food
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 is having negative impacts on our
health
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. Yes, I agree that takeaway
food
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 is attracting consumers and creating an imbalance in our
health
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. I will discuss my view in the essay. On one hand, in today's fast-paced and technology-driven lifestyle, people have limited time to take care of themselves.
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 the highly stressful life, individuals opt for fast
food
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. Consuming take-away foods brings a high risk to our
health
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,
such
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 as cancers, cardiac problems, obesity etc. It is considered to be a fact that there are a lot of unhygienic methods used for cooking.
On the other hand
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, the use of raw materials in
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 restaurants is not of advisable quality.
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, they use ingredients
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 as soda in the
food
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 to make it tastier, which is negative for our
health
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. Many raw materials, namely oil, spices etc are re-used multiple times. Consuming
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 foods increase the
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 risk both in adults
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 children.
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,
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 the sophisticated and stress-filled life, it is challenging to maintain a work-life balance.
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, individuals consider adopting fast
food
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 in their daily lives. People who are away from their homes, too much work pressure, working late, a neutral family system etc all are the reasons to go for convenience
food
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.
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, they are numerous ways to look for a solution to stay healthy.
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,
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, the fast
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 industry is growing it is
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 inviting a lot of
health
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 issues. Personally, I think it is risky to adopt convenience
food
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.
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