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Many countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. Is this a positive or negative development ?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over the amount of consumption of a large
food
 from other
countries
in
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all around the world.
This
 fact has both pros and cons .
However
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 its disadvantages cannot shadow its advantages. Without a shadow of a doubt, importing a wide range of
food
 from different
countries
 plays a paramount role for citizens in today’s world.One important is that the residents can have a chance to choose the myriads of commodities from various
countries
 which can provide the items they need.
For instance
,
Seven Eleven
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 is one of the renowned convenient foods from America that has a bunch of franchises globally to meet the demand consumption of citizens .
Thus
,a wealth of
countries
 importing a great volume of
food
 can bring benefits.
While
 the
reemeding
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remedying
 features of consuming
food
 from
diverse
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the diverse
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 nation
is
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 widely acknowledged, its drawbacks are still existing.Given the fact that, the appearance of
food
 from the various nation
which
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make people tend to forget the traditional ones.It is a sense that the traditional
food
 brand is on the verge of disappearing.
For example
, Trung Nguyen Legend coffee used to be
popular
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 brand in the first 21st century with
a
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numerous cafe
shop
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 but now
this
 kind of shop has been closed because the youngsters are likely to
enjoyed
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 their time at a modern cafe
such
 as
the
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coffee beans or
starbucks
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.
Hence
, importing
food
 from other parts of the country can cause serious problems.
To conclude
, consuming
the
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 product from a diverse nation can bring advantages and disadvantages for the
countries
 but it may do more harm than good.
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