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Societies produce more waste as they become more developed. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem.

#societies #waste #case
The increasing
of
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population leads
many
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to many
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 effects
to
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on
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 the environment. One of the issues was more
people
 in the world,
more
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the more
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waste
 produced.
This
 happened because
as
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 the needs of
people
 followed by the number of populations.
However
,
this
problem
 can be done by giving some ways. In
this
 essay, I will give some solutions to tackle
this
 case.
To begin
 with, commonly, the biggest
waste
 come from the household. Every year, the number of
people
keep
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continues
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continue
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 grow and it leads
improving
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 the needs of
people
.
For instance
, a family which has 4 members spent the household items about $200
in
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a month. In the next month, that family has a new member. It is
possibly
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 that
this
 family will not spend the same amount of money as the previous month even though they minimize their expenditure,
however
, they will spend more money to buy some tools
to
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new
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the new
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baby
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babies
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, which
it
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leads
more
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to more
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waste
. The
waste
that
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caused by
people
 will bring damage to the environment. It will
result
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inresult
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 the bad smell and air which can disturb
the
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human life.
Moreover
, the trash will create some respiratory diseases.
Thus
,
this
problem
 should be solved by
government
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the government
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 which
create
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creates
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 some regulations.
Such
 as,
create
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creating
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the
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a
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 schedule of transportation trash to take the rubbish to every house. The environment will be clear and many
people
 will satisfy too.
To sum up
, it can be reiterated that the
waste
 from humankind will lead to
the
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an
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 environmental
problem
. By having some regulations, it can solve the
problem
 of
the
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waste
 from
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a human
the human
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human
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humans
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.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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