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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is probably true to say that most schools have students who are noisier than others and take some time to settle down in class. Some people argue that if they go on to affect the way other
children
 in the class behave, something should be done about it.
However
, I am not sure that teaching them separately is the answer. Most people prefer to learn in calm surroundings. Clearly, it is much better to be able to hear the teacher than to have to struggle to follow instructions because someone else is talking all the time. In my view,
school
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 is a place where
children
 should work hard and behave well.
That is
 not to say that they shouldn’t enjoy themselves too, but
overall
, their attitude to
school
 should be a serious one. Students who ignore
school
 codes of conduct are, to a certain extent, being quite selfish.
Also
, I’m not convinced that ignoring their bad behaviour is helpful to them. Studies have shown that naughty
children
 respond better to a strict approach in
school
. I tend to think that it is
school’s
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 responsibility to control disruptive
children
. I do not mean by
this
 that they should administer physical punishment, but I do think teachers should be trained to deal with difficult pupils.
In addition
, head teachers should establish rules and ensure that everyone follows them.
While
 I accept that there may be
children
 who are so badly behaved that they cannot be taught in a ‘normal’
school
, I feel that most
children
 can and should be taught together.
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