Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The question of whether or not educational institutions should make teenagers learn how to handle “money problems” has been the subject of recent public discussions.
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some people argue that these topics should not concern the education system at all, I believe that being able to learn how to be financially responsible
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still being young (
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studying in class) is one of the crucial
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that tertiary education should ensure. As long as what is taught is legal and potentially effective there is no reason why teachers should not provide their
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. Learning how to pay taxes, understanding how to handle and manage personal incomes, learning how to invest, knowing what to expect when inflation is rising or how to read
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newspapers, are just examples of daily skills that are essential in order to survive in today’s world. In most cases, lots of individuals find themselves graduating from high school or getting a college degree without knowing anything about the things mentioned and
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being left alone by their parents in facing adults’ problems. It goes without saying that developing financial abilities can be of really great help to them.
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of topics need to be taught professionally in schools meaning that they would have to become a specific subject of educational programs taught by teachers who have appropriate background studies. As a matter of
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being able to properly teach these is an important
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investment by schools and students that would require
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time and hard work but that would benefit both
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of the day.
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, learning how to financially survive and developing these
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of abilities is essential in order to get through different stages of life without depending much on others and represents something that everyone will need to learn at a certain point.
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, I firmly believe that letting schools
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teenagers would be extremely useful rather
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