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nowdays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicinces and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think this is positive or a negative development?

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Today, with the massive progress in medical cures,
the
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 increasing number of
people
 ,who suffered from problematic health matters,
prefer
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preferring
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 to experience
alternative
medicines
 and
treatments
instead
 of consulting with their usual doctor . I believe it is a negative development . some
people
 believe that it is a positive attitude to apply
such
alternative
medicines
 or cures in order to avoid dealing with some bad
effect
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effects
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 of chemical types like tablets.some of them may
experienced
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be experienced
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 or
meight
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might
 heard about that but it is not
the
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a
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 reliable reason to try
another
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another method
other methods
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methods
instead
 of academical ones,because any type of chemical
medicines
 have some side effects that mentioned in their user manual and
also
 they noticed by the doctor, but these matters could not be a major problem
while
 they have reasonable benefits for curing the illnesses.
on the other hand
,by growing up
medical
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with medical
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treatments
 and
also
awaring
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awarding
 about some negative side effects of old ordinary chemical
medicines
,the medical academic
communites
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communities
community
 are trying to replace these old
methods
by
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with
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 new natural
treatments
 to attract
people
 and avoid them
to use
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using
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such
alternative
methods
 which may lead to
irreversable
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irreversible
 damages or some dangerous sicknesses that in some cases cause to die. in conclusion, I think it is a negative trend for
people
 who prefer trying
another
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another treatment
other treatments
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treatments
 and
alternative
medicines
instead
 of academic
methods
 which would suggest
by
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apply
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visiting their usual doctor .
although
, there are some
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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 about
negative
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the negative
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 impacts of chemical
methods
 on other health factors but with regard to new technological natural replaceable cures,
people
 should rely on their usual doctors and ignore trying
another
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another treatment
other treatments
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treatments
 to
aleviate
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alleviate
 their symptoms.
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